Why do you live? For
others’ favor? Whose?
Look around, and see
that all others look to you for yours.
Why seek in others
what they want from you?
Favor – why so
plentiful in giving, yet none left to grant oneself?
We are all like dogs,
chasing our own tail,
Unable to catch what
is already ours.
Don’t ask anyone else
to grant you happiness.
The greatest good is
that which none can give:
Peace and Harmony
It is very understandable and relatable. Even though it is short and seemingly simple it conveys a deep message. The comparison to a dog is fascinating. Good job!
ReplyDeleteYour metaphors are really creative and effective. I like your use of questions because it makes the reader to pay more attention to what you are trying to say.
ReplyDeleteIt's short, it's precise, and it's just the right amount of provocative. If that makes any sense. It has a pulse, a beat to it that makes it enjoyable to read. Catchy, if you will. Good job Spencer.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the metaphor of the dog chasing his own tail. It really conveys your message of self-sufiency.
ReplyDeleteAlthough it is short, it has such a deep and sentimental meaning. Great Job!
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