Harmony
Jaclyn Saik
Live in harmony
the cricket, in concert
accompanies the subtle fog
with a placid song
the blushing orchid grows next to the lily
and the audience gasps at how beautiful
they look next to each other
dew drops sit on the banana leaf
like jewels
Live in harmony
Great imagery and descriptions! I could really visualize what you were describing.
ReplyDeleteI love your picture. The poem is great. It has imagery and serenity. Love the word choice. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteI love the descriptive words and the use of imagery. The whole poem flows really nicely. The poem is calming and the use of the word blushing really helped give the poem life.
ReplyDeleteI think this short poem perfectly flows with the meaning of living in harmony and peace with the world. The picture adds something to it, and the sensory detail made the poem interesting!
ReplyDeleteI like how you compared different aspects of life. It worked really well and painted a good image in the reader's head.
ReplyDeleteI really like the sensory detail. It helped me visualize really well
ReplyDeletein such few lines you created a descriptive image and used a lot of sensory detail. you ignited senses and created a really calm atmosphere through your poem. I also love your painting!!
ReplyDeleteThe way your are able to connect strings of ideas in a way that flows so well made me stop and read this twice because it sounds like everything connects, but in reality, each line is really a poem in its self.
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