Transform
If you want to be in peace with yourself
Be in peace with others around you
Walk away from the hostility around you
because that is the instructions that the master gives us to be happy in life
let go of all worries and you will see a radical change around you
Be like a feather, light , flexible and smooth
Be light as a feather
Because you will move smoothly out of your problems
Be as flexible as a feather
Because everything changes around you and so will you
Be as smooth as a feather
Therefore when people see past the imperfections they will see nothing but an effortless heart
i like how you used the characteristics of a feather as human characteristics. my favorite one was the flexibility because it's straightforward, simple and very true.
ReplyDeleteI like how you explained what we were supposed to be like case and point the feather and then you promptly explained to us the three ways we were supposed act like as if we were a feather. I also liked how the title was implemented within the poem.
ReplyDeleteI love how you do a repetition with the light as a feather, flexible of a feather, smooth as a feather. The message of this is very interesting. I interpreted it as live your life in harmony with nature and the Dao.
ReplyDeleteI like how you compare humans to the feather. How you say we need to be light and flexible like a feather.
ReplyDeleteI love the symbolism you used as well as the connection with the light as a feather.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you described the feather an used it to clearly describe you topic. My favorite part of the poem is how you continued the description of the feather.
ReplyDeleteI loved the repetition with the characteristics of the feather- it made you really think about how the feather connects to you.
ReplyDeleteI love the repetition with the characteristics of the feather- it made you really connect the feather to your life
ReplyDeleteI like how each sentence in this poem conveys a point.
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