you must feel peace within yourself
and within each other
everything must come together
as
o n e
everything will be in harmony
yet you cannot force
this unity upon anything
you cannot force this calm
to come
it will arrive
as the rain pours silently and suddenly
you have
no
control
as the whispering fingers of the trees
slowly
float
to
the
ground
you must wait
as the river flows over
the solid, unyielding canyon
it will some day
one day
carve a valley
in what used to be a rigid surface
you must wait
for the Tao
I loved it sana ! This is very true we should not force anything just let things happen by themselves ! :)
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ReplyDeleteWow Sans! The poem was so great because the imagery consistently changed but was still super clear about your message every time! The format you used was also so clever and E. E. Cummings-esque. That was a great poem.
ReplyDeleteI love the format Sana!! It really adds to the poem and your meaning.
ReplyDeleteThe format really adds to the poem. With the use of the formatting, you created a sense of fluidity and a "map" for the poem.
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ReplyDeleteI love the format that you used in your poem. It really makes it flow and is interesting to read!
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